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You put me down every time I speak, and then wonder why I am silent.

You see my accomplishments as something that is expected, and my failures as something so unbelievable. 

You say doing my best is good enough. You lied. I try my hardest, but to you it doesn't matter unless I'm perfect.

I try my hardest to live up to your expectations, your goals, your dreams, and it has exhausted me.

Working hard for something I don't want is spectacularly awful, yet knowing that if I don't succeed your disappointment will be even worse is difficult.

For once I'd like to have my own expectations, my own goals, my own dreams.

I want to become the person I want to be, not the one you've tried to create.

For everyone out there with their own 'You'.
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prettyflour Featured By Owner May 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey there,

:iconprettyflour: here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested. 

I want to start by saying that I think everyone out there has their own 'You'. Having said that, I found this to be relatable- I think others will too.  
For me, the strength is emotion drawn out of the reader and I love how you used italics to strengthen your...you.  :)

I honestly don't have any constructive feedback to offer on this poem.  I like the brevity- it's short, to the point and a good read.
Thanks so much for sharing your words.  :heart:
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Bickhamsarah Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gosh. I have been experiencing this my whole life. 
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Darkness-be-forever Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
i know how you feel ... sounds like you are living my life
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KayyVenom Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
I love this very much.. I can relate to it well. Thank you for sharing!
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